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Thread: Short Story: A Smugglers Struggle ( Feedback? )

DigiDante
Fri Apr 08, 2005 10:37 am
#1


I have expanded chapter 1 and completed my first draft of Chapter 2.


Tell me what you guys think!!!!




A Smugglers Struggle.


Byron O'Quinn


Selusa Secundus, Sheeana Secundus


- Flurry Server -


Chapter 1: Awakening.


Morning light started to penetrate my closed eyelids. Consciousness started to slowly flow into my body as I began to regain control of my state of mind. My arms were first to move as I released them from their position upon my hips, drawing my hands over my eyes I slowly opened them realizing it was past morning, and the sun was directly above me. Slowly I raised off my knees and began to stretch.


"Good to see you alive Sel," Sheeana said jokingly. "You were in your trance for six hours this time."


I pulled out my datapad to fully notice the time, "Did you sleep any Sis?"


You never would have guessed we're family, our horn patterns differ; Our parents are of different sub-species of Zabrak. The Zacharia Zabraks had to evacuate one of our colonies due to imperical occupation. Our parents met when the Llandous Zabraks took the Zacharias as refugees. The empire hired our father when I was a still a young boy; His skills as a ranger were known throughout the mid-rim, he could take down Rancors in a matter of seconds given the right traps.


"No. I stayed up thinking about what I'm going to get done for my tattoo," she replied to my inquery.


I was honored when Sheeana gave me my facial tattoo about 3 years ago. I chose to represent darkness; the black mass that covers a majority of my face is contrasted by the paleness of my skin. At first glance you do not notice my ethnicity. Upon the 17th annual mark of my birth I chose to take the path of a rebel; a justice keeper; a warrior; a smuggler. My tattoo is representational of my lifestyle, covered in darkness. She and I may have extreme hatred for our father, but he raised us with heritage, and honor.


"It's that time isn't it... you're practically an adult now," I said to her.


As a young girl, our father would abuse her. He was gone for months at a time and had pent up aggression that was released on his children when he would return home. Everyday I worry about my mother since we left 6 years ago; She was to stubborn to leave Isasracro, my father. "He was once a good man Selusa, you know this," she told me before we left. I haven't had contact with her since.


"I got a data transmission from Valor last night," she mumured, "shortly after you begain to meditate. He said that Iridonia took another meteor, almost hit the south outpost. He will meet us on Rori in 3 standard days."


Sheeana is finally being trusted to take marks on her own. The guild has taught her for 4 years, she was 13 when they took her as a pupil.


I reached for my pack and started to gather my materials. "Any message from Imia?"


Imia, beautiful Imia. Her training in the force has given her a life full of stress and hiding. Never in a place to long, she has been on the run for years.


"She dismissed us after dealing with those mercenaries near the enclave." Sheeana reluctantly stated, "The hunters guild dispatched a team to collect her head. She didn't want to stay here any longer than necessary."


"You should know it first hand Sis, a bounty is a bounty."


"But not when they're you're friend!" Anger was in her voice, "You should know this first hand Selusa. I don't need to remind you of Dad's work on Kashyyyk, we've made friends with a ton of those furballs he would have sent to death otherwise."


A distinct smell of oil and suspension exhaust filled my nostrils. "Sis, did you tune a droid lately?"


"...No" she said confusingly, with a hint of anger remaining in that exclimation.


BOOM! A flash of red blinded my left eye as a laser hit the tree I was leaning against. I'm lucky they have poor aim.


My ears still had a sharp ringing; "SH!T" I proclaimed, "They've tracked US!"


Chapter 2: Evasion.


"Eyes!" Sheeana shouted, as I unconsciously closed my eyes.


Smoke filled my nostrils as a loud explosion hit, we've executed this dozens of times. The flash grenade covered the ground in molten plasma and the ground smoked. This cloak of heat and gases gives us just that extra few seconds to get our berrings and escape. I feel a tug on my bandolier and I take off shortly behind Sheeana. Our speeders were parked a good 30m away from our camp under some brush.


The sound of a laser rifle rifle being shot caught my ears and my senses told me to dodge left, I grabbed Sheeana in the effort. I swung my pack from my shoulder and reached in. With my thumb I set the timer on a mine for 5 seconds and threw it behind me. Assuming our unknown enemy was following us, I hoped the mine would scare them.


Dirt flew over my shoulders as the mine errupted and I heard no screams. Throwing the leaves by the handful off our speeders, we both hop on and hit the ignitions. I reached down beside my leg and grab my pistol and shot wildly into the cloud of smoke, dirt, and debris behind us. The cling of the arrows from Sheeana's shigwire gun rang softly over the hover engine starting as the wire was strung from tree to tree with extreme tension, hoping it would closeline our pursuers. I felt my speeder lift off the ground and I began to accelerate, just as Sheeana takes off the opposite direction. She may be a few years younger then me, but damned if she is a good shot, she knows how to avoid her own kind.


As I dart past tree after tree my mind races on thinking who did I piss off this time. Jabba and I are paid off, I somehow made ammends with the Valarians. "They must be after me," I spoke softly. I could clearly see 3 figures on speeders as I looked over my shoulder.


A graul could be seen in the near distance, praying I can successfully maneuvor this, I accelerate towards the graul aiming for the space between its legs. As the form becomes more visible I kill the engine just as I reach the underneath of this bohemoth. I slowly decellerate and begin to see the bike drags the ground as I hug it and go underneath this Graul. The nub of a tail was the perfect lever for me to grab onto; my body whips off my speeder and I take a handful of his back hair, furiously annoying the beast. Climbing up it's back, one hand swats at me as another grabs one of the hunters off his speeder; I swore I could hear bones crack in the grip of this beast. His two friends must have circled around. A bolt of red hits right beneath my foot, singeing the hair sending a nauseating stinch into my nostrils. The beast spins around quickly, throwing me from his back.


Flying through the air I can't help but wonder, "Where the hell is my sister."


Darkness entered my eyes as I hit the tree.


Chapter 3: Escape.


Coming soon.






Selusa Secundus - Elder Smuggler - September 2003.
Sheeana Secundus - Respec Jedi - Elder Carbineer @ heart.
Raylonis Del'Rathin - Elder Chef, Dancer - Retired / Canceled July 2005.
Leader of the fallen Guild, Veil of Silence.

Without the past, the future would never happen.
Believes in a better future for SWG.
Everytime a Rollback or Additional server thread is spawned SOE murders a kitten. Please... think of the kittens and stop this erradication.
DigiDante
Fri Apr 08, 2005 10:38 am
#2

reserved



Selusa Secundus - Elder Smuggler - September 2003.
Sheeana Secundus - Respec Jedi - Elder Carbineer @ heart.
Raylonis Del'Rathin - Elder Chef, Dancer - Retired / Canceled July 2005.
Leader of the fallen Guild, Veil of Silence.

Without the past, the future would never happen.
Believes in a better future for SWG.
Everytime a Rollback or Additional server thread is spawned SOE murders a kitten. Please... think of the kittens and stop this erradication.
Isi-Lia
Fri Apr 08, 2005 11:15 am
#3

looks good



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Danei
Fri Apr 08, 2005 11:53 am
#4

Five Bothan salute! Nice work.





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DigiDante
Fri Apr 08, 2005 11:59 am
#5



Danei wrote:
Five Bothan salute! Nice work.





Thanks

Danei
Pilot
Posts: 666
Registered: 12-27-2003

Spooky!!!!!



Selusa Secundus - Elder Smuggler - September 2003.
Sheeana Secundus - Respec Jedi - Elder Carbineer @ heart.
Raylonis Del'Rathin - Elder Chef, Dancer - Retired / Canceled July 2005.
Leader of the fallen Guild, Veil of Silence.

Without the past, the future would never happen.
Believes in a better future for SWG.
Everytime a Rollback or Additional server thread is spawned SOE murders a kitten. Please... think of the kittens and stop this erradication.
Elite_Noob
Fri Apr 08, 2005 4:30 pm
#6

nice start Selusa.. cant wait to read the rest of it



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atone48732
Sat Apr 09, 2005 12:12 am
#7


NIce story man


I liek it


lol makin me want to take a shot at writting one now hehe.. we'll see

Message Edited by atone48732 on 04-09-2005 07:35 AM



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bring back TEras Kasi and the melee profs as expertise skills.. bring some fun and real diversification to SWG
Jarkatoo
Sat Apr 09, 2005 12:38 am
#8

good story Sel. keep it coming.....



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Bossov
Sat Apr 09, 2005 2:39 am
#9

/thumbsup
Hey, nice stuff Selusa! Looking forward to the rest of the story.



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